Very nice. I liked it a lot; it was amusing yet had a deeper message. Some authors find it difficult to write dialogue, let alone a snippet that's almost entirely dialogue, but I hardly noticed that until I reviewed it because the speech seemed so natural. The imagery is also wonderful here too, particularly in the last paragraph.
One minor typo: "We tried to boil their oceans dry using a giant solar powered laser." There was a pause is lacking a period.
Anyway, hi, I'm new here. After reading some of your works on ff.net and your webpage, I was thrilled to see you had a livejournal, and even better, one that you use to post drabbles and new writings you may not post elsewhere. Thus, I have friended you in order to better watch your work.
Also, I see you have apparently written this epic, Stormhangar, that has now been taken down in what I can only assume is a fit of perfectionism. After reading your delicious short with Sidewinder (http://koilungfish.livejournal.com/6462.html) in your journal, my curiousity is even more piqued. I can't imagine anything you could write that would be unworthy of posting, and you're depriving us new readers of a no doubt very great pleasure... so is there any way I could persuade you to repost it, or show it to me? Pretty please? ;)
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Date: 2007-09-02 07:52 pm (UTC)One minor typo:
"We tried to boil their oceans dry using a giant solar powered laser."
There was a pause is lacking a period.
Anyway, hi, I'm new here. After reading some of your works on ff.net and your webpage, I was thrilled to see you had a livejournal, and even better, one that you use to post drabbles and new writings you may not post elsewhere. Thus, I have friended you in order to better watch your work.
Also, I see you have apparently written this epic, Stormhangar, that has now been taken down in what I can only assume is a fit of perfectionism. After reading your delicious short with Sidewinder (http://koilungfish.livejournal.com/6462.html) in your journal, my curiousity is even more piqued. I can't imagine anything you could write that would be unworthy of posting, and you're depriving us new readers of a no doubt very great pleasure... so is there any way I could persuade you to repost it, or show it to me? Pretty please? ;)