Unfinished Fics: Crown of Lights

[koilungfish]

Unfinished Fics #14
Crown of Lights, SLASH
Starscream and Dreadmoon get some alone time for the first time in four million years.

Comments

[lunatron.livejournal.com]

Hmm, on the one hand, I like the idea of Starscream being scarred all over and Dreadmoon finding that turn-on, because Starscream, survived all that. The missing breast sort of reminds me of stories of Amazon archers.

Starscream implying himself to be one of the last females is a bit... ehn. That feels overdone and silly. I'd rather see a stickyfic wherein everyone's genders under the armour are rolled by dice and no one finds out what his or her lover is until they actually go at it, kind of like Discworld dwarves. I mean, yes, the Decepticons were startled to see the female Autobots, but the female Autobots are obviously female, which again with the Discworld dwarves, is weirdo and bad. if those female Autobots would just wash off that lipstick and wear properly bulky forms, they wouldn't be such sick, perverted deviants! Or something like that.

Starscream self-identifying as male but being physically female seems fine, to me.

I also like Starscream ditching Megatron because Megatron upgraded his cock too big for two reasons. 1) They're robots. They should have upgradeable cocks. If they have cocks at all. 2) These fics always have everyone with huge wangs, and no one ever finds it uncomfortable. So Starscream not enjoying it was a nice, more realistic touch.

Vagina dentata! Awesome.

(The one time I was convinced to write stickyfic, cocks were detachable and retractable, and most folks tended to have several different sizes and shapes on hand. Some people would have buckets of them, with ridges and LEDs and built-in vibrators... it didn't ever come up in the fic itself, since the characters in question were consenting and being rather vanilla, but everyone in the war is pretty much default equipped with retractable teeth in the port.)

Dreadmoon kind of squicked me. I mean, yes, logically, if there was any sexual torture to be done, Decepticons would do it, to males and females alike, but... urgh, Dreadmoon just came across as way skeevy, here. I wanted him to go die in a fire, and I'm totally okay with fics about non-sexual torture, so I have some weird double-standard going on.

Dreadmoon wanting to robotify everything is kind of... why did no one think of this sooner?

"What, 'thou shalt not lie with car as thou liest with truck'?"

I have no idea where that was going, but it seems interesting.

I like that Starscream is perfectly capable of dominating without a wang.

I loathe the term 'femme' in Transformers.

The random discussion of how many brains everyone has and their locations is weirdly funny.

[koilungfish.livejournal.com]

I know. It has a sort of deep resonance, even though it defies the logic that he could've gotten it all fixed.

Yeah, it's pretty silly. Not sure why I did that.

Nice to know someone got on with it. Confused the hell out of me, probably because things got changed over different drafts.

Upgradeable everythings! And there is such a thing as too big, yes.

Well, why not? He's a Decepticon.

[It'd make sense, yes]

Yeah, that scene probably should've been kicked out. I have no idea what I was trying to say there.

I have no idea. Possibly it's something so basic that nobody's really considered changing it yet?

It does, doesn't it? Don't know where it was going, but it might have been interesting if it got there.

Absolutely. He certainly should be.

I'm pretty sick of it too.

Yeah, I'm just not sure why it's in *there*.

[lunatron.livejournal.com]

Well, if the scars don't degrade combat performance and don't hamper him in getting off, why bother getting them fixed? Starscream is fairly pragmatic, and while he's vain, not too many people are going to be seeing him naked. Also, if Dreadmoon is any indication, Decepticons find under-scars sexy, so again, why waste time getting them fixed up all 'pretty'?

It's pretty much a badfic trope to make Character X Last Of The Females, so maybe that wormed its way into your head somehow.

Hah, I would have written all the Autobots as having dentata, too, if I ever had the urge to write a fic where that was relevant. Which, thankfully, I so don't.

The G2s would have thought about robotifying the robots, I am pretty sure, what with their, "I have no idea that organic life is even alive," issue.

Design line banging taboos would be kind of interesting.

Ugh, I was asked in chat yesterday if I was a femme or not. I ended up replying that I don't believe in femmes, but I was sorely tempted to reply that I was butch or something.

...actually, if Dreadmoon has brains in his boots, to really expose his full vulnerability to Starscream, shouldn't he have taken his boots off, too?

[koilungfish.livejournal.com]

True, true, although for them to be "sexy" then having scars, not getting them fixed, would have to be a relatively common thing ... just seems a mite odd somehow.

More like my innate distaste for female Decepticons was showing.

A very sensible idea on the Autobots' part.

How they'd be organic-styled to start with is another question.

Yeah, someone should do something with that. But not me.

... *what*?

Yeah, but then he'd fall over. His feet are part of his boots.